I've seen you watching the shadows with unseeing eyes, trying hard to sleep at night, awaiting the remnants of a half remembered dream...
Sometimes I watch the sweat trickle down your neck or your eye lashes twitching when you're asleep. Your eyes move beneath your eye lids and your lips are smiling. I've pondered this dream you've tried to explain to me but had I no time amidst my corporate tales. You breathed in when I brawled, like mother did, every time father would get angry at her when I was just a child. Like her, you created an ever growing space around you, absorbing all the negative energy.
You quietly slept when I pondered over your words, re-read them and rebuilt them in permutations. I peaked into your recollection about when you first fell in love with me. Then about how you felt that you were but a prisoner of that love. You wept while I reaped the happiness of your sacrifices. You cared for me while I was busy ignoring your silent pleas. You spared your dreams when I was locking you and pulling you along in mine...
I watched you shiver as your slender arms were wrapped around yourself in the cold. Had I hogged up the covers again? And I remembered the first time I held an umbrella all for you so you wont get wet on that rainy night you blushed and said "yes" to me... I remembered the smile on your lips that had vanished over the years from being what everyone wanted you to be. I remembered how you loved the windows open at night but you'd learnt to leave it closed because I didn't want you to dream. I'd found my calling but I never realized how you'd left yours for me...
When I pulled every inch of you for myself, I've seen you watching the shadows with unseeing eyes, awaiting the remnants of that half remembered dream... I've pondered your dreams over and over again. I've tucked your hair behind your ears so I could see your smile. I've left the windows open tonight for I wanted you to think beyond me. I let the wind blow your hair like how you've always liked it. I wanted to remind myself that I didn't own you just because you were once a dream come true.
I fell asleep, letting you go free because I loved you so and whatever I did, I did because I didn't know... When I woke up, the windows were closed. But you were smiling at me...
Beautiful.....
ReplyDeleteThanks da :)
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DeleteVery nice article! Well written, and touches upon some interesting points.
ReplyDeleteYo bro! :)
DeleteVery positive, lovely read. Keep penning more.
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it. I've having some heavy writer's blocks these days :(
Deleteawesome bro ..... as expected , nothing less from you bro :)
ReplyDeletethanks man for the motivation!
Deletebeautiful!!
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ReplyDeleteYo rogue1 thanks! :) Do you copy? :D
Deleteda i like the way u have this fab ending to all ur writings, but da me poor heart is gonna jump out if u dont take the emoti factor down a notch or two....u know how i jump to conclusions, and all ur reads, have this heavy sadness and inner conflict, like a terrible nightmare, dragging you deeper n deeper....no air....heavy stuff man...read the next one and thats what really got to me...go light n fluffy and u have me hook, line n sinker...:)
ReplyDeletegreat writing and great endings...but did i take the sheet maatti did i hog the covers again? aakayirunnu...oru international touch....;)
Thanks for the long comment. :) yes I made a modification based on your suggestion. Sometimes some words done come along and it usually takes a second read or someone else to point out. :) And hey, about the flavor, well, I tend to see a little deeper into things. This one for once was about how most males today ignore their female better half's.... I hope that surfaced out, none of the people said anything about it though, so no idea.... I look forward to writing some light weight stuff real soon.. thanks again! Tc
Deletepinne ee comment moderation fair alla to...where's the fun???
ReplyDeleteLike I said, I keep getting spam comments from some real weird websites so I disabled anonymous comments and enabled moderation. Even capcha's dont seem to be able to stop the attack. And the moderation is really fair coz I post whatever people say, good or bad :) I like a lil criticism for my writing always.
DeleteIts beautiful and heart touching...
ReplyDeleteThanks yaar :) appreciate the time you took to leave a word for me. Do keep reading!
DeleteNyc...and i think some lines wer too gud... Gud job..!!! :)
DeleteThanks da :) Ill keep trying...
ReplyDeletehey. just read through your work.
ReplyDeleteReally touched by it. 4 years and I never got to know u.
I never tried. I was busy around one person who finally just didnt understand me at all.
All your words are deep and beautiful. there's this strength that would make any girl feelgood about herself.
I wish I undid a few things that I did and got to be closer to you. I would have earned a good friend who could understand me.
It takes a real man to understand a woman and to respect her fragility and the strength in her weakness.
Thanks for writing this one. :)
Nice one da...
ReplyDeleteKeep writing...: )
thanks Anupama :)
ReplyDeleteWow. Beautiful :)
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